Thorn Nightbreeze

[Sir Thorn Nightbreeze]

the roleplayer

NAME: William
GENDER: Male
AGE: 23
ROLEPLAY EXPERIENCE: For about 4 years.
OTHER CHARACTERS: Soul lionheart, Sir Edmound Knight of Twilght
HOW YOU FOUND US: A friend.


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Thorn Liam Nightbreeze
You either die a hero, or you live long enough to see yourself become the villain.

character basics

NICKNAMES: thorn
AGE: 16
GROUP: Student
YEAR: year 11
BIRTHDAY: July 8
GENDER: Male

PLAY-BY: He has a long scar down his right eye going from his forehead to chin. He has sandy blonde hair. Bright blue eyes.

appearance

The scars he carrys up and down his body.

personality

He love walks and swordfighting, he dreams of being knighted. He hates evil and men who beat women. his goal is to be a king some day.

family & history

FATHER: Liam Nightbreeze age 45.
MOTHER: Rose Nightbreeze age 40.
SIBLINGS: Jenna Nightbreeze age 16 Shes is his adopted sister.
OTHER FAMILY: None.

HISTORY:He almost lost his father to war he had to fight off bandits that tried to raid his family home. he has been training with his master in swordfighting master Yun sung. He tried to be draft into the last war but his family stopped him he feels he must prove himself to be a hero.

dream form

His Dream form is a knight in Saquine armor this is because taht is what he strives to be come and he carrys a large blue steel claymore. he has a black cloak on he rides on a large black horse that has a flaming mane and hoofs. He goes by the name Soul Nightbreeze. He become the right hand of vengnce when in his dream form. He hands down Judgement on all who are evil.

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Pending

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Where to begin. Well, first, you have clearly not read anything on the site or you would have a better grasp of how to write an application for it. My suggestion is looking at things before you leap to avoid wasting all of our time in the future. That said, I will take this section by section.

1. Appearance/PB: You do not have an appearance. You do not have a PB. The rules clearly state that all non-dream beings must be represented by some sort of actual human model. Try www.hollow-art.com. Also, even if you had a model, your appearance is far too short. We judge our apps on thoroughness, a skill that you have not exhibited in the slightest. For an example of a good appearance, click here.

2. Personality: .....I'm looking and I'm seeing nothing but a few bleak sentences on his generic likes and dislikes. I don't know if you realize it, but this is modern-day England. Knights exist in title only. Like Elton John. For an example of a good personality, you can look here.

3. History: That is not a history. That is a description of a few events. Likewise, again, this is set in modern day england. Please be realistic. And thorough. For a good example of a history, click Here.

This needs some major changes. Thank you. :]

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